The Satyr Prince
CHAPTER 2
11:20 – says she bites her lips instead of lip. I’ll check that it is singular on my end too.
11:29 – the word “cave” sounds like “cay”
CHAPTER 3
10:25 – “one imperfect in form” is sounding like “in perfect in form.” I’ll fix this the file as well, but to avoid it sounding weird, can we do “one with imperfect form?”
CHAPTER 5
4:50 – I might just be hearing it weird but it sounds like “sit over her features” instead of “set.”
CHAPTER 11
-6:15 – There is a very long pause here mid-scene, but it could have been my internet buffering. So ignore this if I’m imagining things LOL
CHAPTER 16
-5:55 – “flinging the doors opened” can we make that “open?”
CHAPTER 19
-16:20- “the bolt he was chained (to) probably went…” The word “to” is missing
RETAIL SAMPLE
around 1:40 it abruptly turns into the middle of the prologue. I think it would work better just being one chunk of the prologue, or starting with the “Prologue” header and the start of the prologue so it isn’t confusing what just happened.
Rebekah Lewis 